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Language Analysis: First and foremost, we want to express…
VCE Language Analysis essay scoring 75%: As there is a surge in popularity at the River Bakery after being awarded the 2024 #GoldenSlice title, there…
As there is a surge in popularity at the River Bakery after being awarded the 2024 #GoldenSlice title, there has been growing concern in community safety and management within the store. Consequently, Carter Chan, owner of the bakery writes a message to the River Bakery social media, in which he expresses his gratitude for the support, but also disapproves and responds to antisocial behaviour. Addressing his audience of both new and returning customers, Chan aims to show gratitude while also quelling any safety concerns through his social media post, ultimately growing his business in return.
Chan opens the post by immediately gracefully thanking customers for the 'overwhelming support'. Choosing to begin thankful, establishes a trusted relationship with the audience, as he does not seem unhappy with their visiting, and instead positions himself in a positive way to the audience. Chan continues by mentioning their '#Golden slice award' establishing his business as great at what they do, piquing the interest of his audience. By including this in the first few sentences, Chan inclines the customer base to continue reading, with an ulterior purpose of having people visit their store, through credibility of the award. Carter continues by offering a 'wholeheart[ed] apology' to the audience. This is supported by labelling the event as 'unprecedented' and not 'anticipated', leading the whole customer base to see that the poor handling of the popularity surge will not happen again. This encourages the customers, both new and old, to have further trust in the establishment- making them more likely to visit, deliberately done by Carter to form a stronger customer-producer relationship. Carter reiterates this by showing acknowledgement of those who 'travelled lengthy distances', purposefully addressing a specific group in his customer base that may feel least inclined to visit- showing his advanced knowledge of his consumers. This aids his underlining purpose of having continuous visits and profit to his store.
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Language Analysis: “A real home is where there are people…
VCE Language Analysis essay scoring 60%: Through her portrayal of home in ‘Rainbow’s End’, Harrison underscores that for First Nations people, ‘home’ is…
Through her portrayal of home in ‘Rainbow’s End’, Harrison underscores that for First Nations people, ‘home’ is inseparable from individual’s connection to country, even within a discriminatory society. Utilising the character of Nan dear, Harrison suggests a strong tie to the land through particularly older generations of Indigenous Australians. This is evident through Nan dear’s dialogue of ‘they forced us to leave…our home’, symbolically conveying intergenerational trauma. The noun ‘home’ does not aim to simply reference their place of residence but instead illustrates the character’s strong connection to the land. Additionally, the past tense verb ‘forced’ supports the position that Nan dear suffers from generational trauma, along with many indigenous Australians, where they were removed from the land, where they had a deep connection and a sense of belonging. This further reveals how colonisation stripped Indigenous Australians from the right of choosing their own home, at a place where their cultural identity and sense of belonging would be respected and
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Language Analysis: 2024 VCAA exam - Our Local Gym
VCE Language Analysis essay scoring 75%: In response to the council's withdrawn subsidy to Our Local Gym, Sandy Gestalt, chair of the gym's committee,…
In response to the council's withdrawn subsidy to Our Local Gym, Sandy Gestalt, chair of the gym's committee, convened a pivotal meeting to discuss the future of the beloved company. The convivial speech presented to valued gym members in attendance at the emergency gathering, delineates the dire gravity of Our Local Gym's position and endeavours to amalgamate local community members to support the proposed partnership with Long Live Lollies. Gestalt thereby advocates compromise amongst audiences in order to solidify their vote to the savouring change and ensure the gym prospers in the future.
From the outset, Gestalt establishes the familiarity shared amongst participants to the gathering. In projecting the solidified persistence of members who always "work together" in averting "uncomfortable" circumstances, Gestalt elucidates the underlying values of solidarity values within her reciprocal relationship. Thus, the author empowers the cherished members of the gym and ultimately deconstructs her authoritative position as "Chair" of the committee to foster equality amongst all valued members. This convivial approach may therefore endear Gestalt to the familiarised audience, ensuring she can maintain a trustworthy persona. The glorified notions of determination is further conveyed as the basis of Our Local Gym, a "Safe Space" orchestrated by "council support" and the devotion of members. Gestalt thus commemorates the members in attendance to the meeting, as their contribution in "fees" and culture has sustained an opportunistic gym environment. This lionization of members attempts to thereby evoke further support to ensuing propositions, as they are positioned to recognise the "catering" nature of the gym that juxtaposes "competitive" and "obnoxious" commercialised gym venues. This drawn comparison further conveys the implications of this indignant council decision, as Gestalt alludes that members will have little autonomy but to partake in these intimidating environments in the event that Our Local Gym closes. The maintained future of the gym is thus invited as a top priority to attending members.
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Language Analysis: how to improve working from home
VCE Language Analysis essay scoring 75%: From the onset, Martin suggests that the company depends on everyone cooperating in tandem to be successful. He…
From the onset, Martin suggests that the company depends on everyone cooperating in tandem to be successful. He opens by acknowledging that over the past few years many workplaces, including their own have done "'their best to keep staff both safe and productive" despite the "challenges". By implying that they have gone out of their way for the benefit of employees, even despite potential hardship by reminding them they had to take on risks for them, it presents the employers as thoughtful and caring about their employees' wellbeing. This would make employees feel grateful for their bosses and feel obliged to do what they say. Martin goes on to suggest that whilst the WFH plans were beneficial at the time, they "come at a cost to our company". In utilising inclusive language when describing "our company", he is leading employees to view the company, not as his, but rather a shared one - placing value of the future on all employees, not just management. This may lead employees going along with the suggestion so as to cut costs in future. Adding to this view of shared responsibility, the Martin & Moloney logo has different hands on top of one another. This
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Language Analysis: Hapsey podcast
VCE Language Analysis essay scoring 72.5%: Recently a proposed development plan for 'Hapsey Wetlands' by Nature + Adventure Group has sparked concerns…
Recently a proposed development plan for 'Hapsey Wetlands' by Nature + Adventure Group has sparked concerns among its local Hapsey residents. Janelle Tanley a life long Hapsey resident and local podcaster posts her podcast episode 32, titled 'Hapsey Happenings'. In a concerned and dismissive tone, Tanley argues for the Hapsey community to "consider what is best" for their ecological landmark - the Hapsey wetlands, and avoid to avoid the destruction of their "native" environment. Tanley also appeals to the local Hopsey community and the members of Nature + Adventure group. Accompanying her piece is a cartoon image of the connections to nature upbrings to a society. Also, illustrated a photograph of the consequences of industrial pollution. This complements her piece as the episode to highlight the consequence of development.
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Language Analysis: The argument form was an open letter…
VCE Language Analysis essay scoring 75%: In response to workplaces adopting new polices after COVID 19 adaptions, Martin and Maloney, a large…
In response to workplaces adopting new polices after COVID 19 adaptions, Martin and Maloney, a large advertising firm has decided to switch to a four day working week. CEO S. Martin alerts his employees of this change via an open letter to all staff. Martin formally, and empathetically contends that his staff consider engaging in four day face to face work or even five days for incentives. By first addressing why work from home polices were implemented, Martin poses these polices as once effective, however, now outdated as the height of COVID 19 is over. Moreover, Martin establishes the benefits of his proposal, and welcomes any feedback for his audience to entertain the idea of returning.
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Language Analysis: In WHALITC it is better to be an…
VCE Language Analysis essay scoring 70%: To be considered an outsider from any social group is typically seen as prejudiced or uncharitable to those who…
To be considered an outsider from any social group is typically seen as prejudiced or uncharitable to those who are excluded. In the case of the Blackwood family of Shirley Jackson’s 1950’s gothic, thriller “We Have Always lived in the Castle” that appears to be untrue. In the novel Jackson endeavours to highlight what she sees as the benefits to living in isolation, whereas in reality she illustrates the consequences and entrapment of physical and social separation from society. Jackson uses two main social groups to display the useless interactions between them. The main social groups of the novel are the Villagers being the outsiders from the insider’s group of the Blackwood family. In the context of the novel the Blackwood’s can be referred to as both the insiders or the outsiders as the perspective of which group is considered as insider or outsider depends on the reader. In this interpretation the immediate Blackwood family will be explored as the insiders and others such as the villagers and cousin Charles will be analysed as outsiders to the Blackwood’s. However, the consequences of being an insider or an outsider differ depending on the character. For Mary- Katherine (Merricat), Jackson depicts her with the most amount of niche insider groups with little movement in and out of those groups, highlighting the benefits of being an insider for Merricat. Whereas for Constance she appears to be involved in more social groups that interact with the outsiders, suggesting that for her being an insider may impact her life and cause her to suffer. Conversely, Cousin Charles despite being a member of the Blackwood family is not considered an insider, initially by Merricat and eventually by Constance and Uncle Julian as well, emphasizing that ignoring Charles’ desires to be an insider that he is still considered an outsider. Overall, the categorisation of characters into both internal and external social groups of the Blackwood family benefit some characters more than others.
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Language Analysis: VCAA 2020 Drone Article
VCE Language Analysis essay scoring 80%: The rise of recreational drone use and the threat that this poses to the farming industry of Victoria’s Shire…
The rise of recreational drone use and the threat that this poses to the farming industry of
Victoria’s Shire of Byways has been a point of concern. In response, Warwick Bandle’s
speech at the shire’s council meeting implores that rigid licensing procedures must be
implemented for both recreational and commercial drone use, to ensure the prosperity of
both the farming and tourism industries. Speaking with an urgent, and at times, confounded
voice, Bandle appeals to the wider Byways Shire community with particular focus on its
council members in an attempt to raise awareness of the dangers posed by recreational
drones in their present state and prompt action towards more rigid regulation of their use.
Bandle begins with an ominous depiction of the threat that inept drone usage presents to
the valued farming industry. Impugning that the unskilled engagement with such
technologies is a ‘costly problem’ for ‘us farmers,’ he appeals to his listeners’ hip pocket
nerve, utilising ‘us’ to quickly include all farmers as victims of this economic threat, and thus
imply that his concerns should, too, be of their utmost interest. As he prompts readers to
‘just imagine’ these ramifications, he imparts a sense of limitlessness and immensity to
them, thus crafting the need to address them as all the more imperative. Providing
materialistic examples of these consequences, he alliterates that the inexperienced users of
these drones may come ‘crashing through crops’ in pursuit of their fallen vehicles; an
audible attempt to evoke the concern of his listeners who are farmers – and heightened by
the barbaric, destructive connotations exuded by the verb ‘crashing.’ This is visually
reinforced by his accompanying photograph, depicting one of such drones wedged at a
cumbersome angle in an expansive patch of grass that is likely representative of farmers’
precious land – and thus the physical damage that such technological malfunctions may
induce. Further, the jovial body language of the person in pursuit of the drone –
characterised by her impractical dress and cardigan as someone who is likely not a farmer
herself – elicits an air of ignorance towards the damage she is inadvertently, and likely
unintentionally, causing.
Bandle then moves to implore that Byways’ farming industry deserves a higher level of
concern as such an intrinsic component of the Shire’s prosperity. As he asserts that these
workers are Byways’ ‘backbone,’ this metaphor imparts notions of dependence and
reliance, thus, insinuating that the Shire will be somewhat dysfunctional in the absence of
the farming industry, thus, elevating the importance with which it is prioritised. Affirming
that the workers of this industry have resided in the area ‘for generations,’ he constructs a
sense of longevity to their existence and value. This serves as an understates juxtaposition
to the fleeting, short-lived nature of ‘the tourists’ who are currently of the council’s express
concern, thus, positioning such as order of priority as all the more trivial and in need of reevaluation.
Bandle’s focus then takes a shift, as he explicitly expounds the value of drones
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Language Analysis: 2024 VCAA exam section C
VCE Language Analysis essay scoring 70%: Since the termination of the funding towards Our Local Gym fitness club, many from the Gym committee have begun…
Since the termination of the funding towards Our Local Gym fitness club, many from the Gym committee have begun to question the consequences of the future of the club. Notably, Sandy Gestalt, the chair of the Our Local Gym committee, speaks to the members of the gym, voicing the concerns regarding the council subsidy being withdrawn. She supports her assertion that in order for the club to continue thriving, the members must vote upon the merge between the club and Long Live Lollies. Gestalt addresses not only the members of the committee, but more indirectly the wider community of the customers those responsible for exacerbating the situation, to present her message with efficiency - in hope that direct action, will be taken for the future of the Gym.
From the outset, Sandy Gestalt overlays the significance of the Gym through it's inclusion and intentions - candidly illustrating the magnitude to which the Gym must remain standing. By beginning the speech with a concerned yet hopeful voice Gestalt recognises the ability for the committee to "work together" to save the Gym, followed by a pun, "worked out together". By incorporating a combination of humour & inclusive language, Gestalt appeals to her direct audience by beginning on a positive note, thereby encouraging hope and from the members while also offering them authority and control in determining the future of the Gym. Furthermore, Gestalt shifts to comparing Our Local Gym to other competing Gyms, yet through this comparison she bluntly reveals her bias through the use of connotated terms. While referring to her Gym as "safe", "young-at-heart" and "accepting", while she frames other local gyms as "competitive", and "obnoxious", Sandy Gestalt utilises juxtaposition to capture the inclusivity and welcoming nature of Our Local Gym, while framing other surrounding Gyms as simply materialistic and judgmental, thus signifying the necessity for the Gym to continue running as it attracts a wide range of locals, as oppose to other Gyms. This, incidently, inclines the committee members attending the meeting to side with Sandy Gestalt and support the movement in saving the Gym.
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Language Analysis: The music venue The Salty Boot is…
VCE Language Analysis essay scoring 70%: AA practice - The Salty Boot Following an increase of noise complaints within an inner-city suburb of Metropolo…
AA practice - The Salty Boot
Following an increase of noise complaints within an inner-city suburb of Metropolo in Melbourne, local rock musician, Vince D'Angelo campaigns against the closure of 'the Salty Boot' music venue via his speech in the campaigning rally. Due to the increase of population within the area, the residents are claiming that the music venue is "too noisy", and that the community would benefit from its removal. D'Angelo protests against these claims, contending that the venue is a vibrant space for individuality, creativity and music lovers to unite.
Opening with a heartfelt tone, D'Angelo establishes The Salty Boot as a "beloved" environment for the music lover audience. He heavily implies a binary opposition between the supporters of the Salty boot and the "naysayers and complainers" who wish for it's closure, promoting a deep connection with the music lover audience, creating a supportive environment. Continuing with a sarcastic tone, D'Angelo exposes recent statistical evidence promoting the protection of the music venue, with over "80% of Melbourne residents" wanting the venue to remain open, despite the protestors who argue that the venue is "too loud" and "too colourful". This inclusion of evidence paired with the juxtaposition of beliefs creates a tense environment in which the audience is encouraged to evaluate the communitie's values and determine the true nature of the situation, with a majority of people engaging positively with the venue. D'Angelo continues his attack against the protestors, sarcastically claiming that the removal of the music venue will result in a "boutique hairdressing salon" or "hip cafe", businesses that lack the vibrancy that the Salty Boot brings to the neighbourhood, promoting a sense of justification in the audience to preserve a creative, fun environment in a changing community.
AA - The Salty Boot
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Language Analysis: argument analysis
VCE Language Analysis essay scoring 72.5%: In the recent surge in expansion of the town of Royson, an announcement has been made regarding the railway…
In the recent surge in expansion of the town of Royson, an announcement has been made regarding the railway extension into Royson. In a response to this announcement, a local member for the region, Siobhan Pierce, has published an article on her website titled “Green light for the Royson Rail Project” regarding the plan for railway extension. The article contends towards the individuals in the community of Royson town as well as new members of the community by informing them the benefits of the railway and endorsing the development.
Pierce opens the piece by welcoming new members of the community into Royson town. Pierce acknowledges the importance of “maintaining traditional character of the town” but due to the expansion Pierce argues that it will “impede our potential as modern and thriving town”. Through the use of inclusive language Pierce reminds the members of the community the necessity of improving the town’s infrastructure to not limit their “potential” encouraging those who has a strong traditional value to be more inclined to listen to Pierce. Pierce continues by stating that shortest distance from their town of Royson to the “nearest” station requires 50 kilometres of travel. The word “nearest” puts the audience into perspective the distance it will take currently for the people in the community to travel from Royson to closest train station influencing the feeling of isolation into the readers. This would cause the individuals in the community to encourage and endorse the development of extension of railway from Gullyville.
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Language Analysis: AA 2023 exam. single paragraph.
VCE Language Analysis essay scoring 75%: The young musicians contest and rebut potential queries their opposition may have for rejuvenating the Narrow…
The young musicians contest and rebut potential queries their opposition may have for rejuvenating the Narrow Valley community. The musician's commence with a conversational and professional tone as they break down their oppositions reasoning for being against the new idea of music festivals in their local area being explored. The intended effect of the chosen tone is to foster connection with the Narrow Valley community by making conversation more approachable and comfortable for the audience whilst also introducing a respectful interaction. By doing so, the musicians are setting up their likelihood for the audience to allow their voice to be heard after the authors establishing a respectful communication system. hypophora is strategically used to dismantle concerns the audience may have with the author proposal. This was intentionally used to
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Language Analysis: Toppadale cinema vcaa 2021
VCE Language Analysis essay scoring 77.5%: The arising risks of shutting down for a local cinema in the regional town of toppdale has ignited concern…
The arising risks of shutting down for a local cinema in the regional town of toppdale has ignited concern and unease within local residents. This collective apprehension provoked the cinemas marking manager Ava, to publish a social media post on the Toppandale community voice page, on the 12 of September discussing the potential unfortunate closing. She contends that Toppadale cinema is a vital part of the communities history and social life and must be supported by locals to prevent it from closing down. Directing her arguments towards the toppadale residents, Ava aims to convey the significance of the local cinema
From the outset, Ava draws attention to the cinemas significance as a part of toppdales heritage and identity. Ava begins by describing the cinema as the "backbone" of the town since the "1910's" having survived the "great depression" and "two world wars". Through mentioning the cinemas historical background Ava appeals to a sense of tradition and history, she emphasises the significance of the cinemas, positioning the building as a symbol of endurance, evoking feelings of nostalgia and civic loyalty. This is intended to propel the local residents to remember and acknowledge the true importance of the cinema, as a focal part of their town and its long lasting heritage. Ava then furthers her point by constantly referring to the town as "our town" and directly addressing
the audience when she states that "by connecting with you" she hopes to gain community support. By employing various uses of inclusive language, aiming to involve the community members, Ava reinforces unity and shared responsibility within the toppandale residents. In this way she compels the readers to realise the similarities in values they share with the reader regarding a join concern for their treasured cinema, seeking to further bridge the gap between Ava and the local residents, persuading the Toppadale people towards understanding Ava's contention. In conjunction with this she emphasises how the valuable community building is at "risk of closing its doors, Forever!", using a hyperbole and dramatic punctuation to heighten the emotional impact of her message. The capitalisation and exclamation mark amplify the sense of finality and loss, creating a sense of urgency and guilt among the locals if they fail to take action, intending to prompt the locals to make sense of the cinemas historical importance and understand the urgent need to protect it.
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Language Analysis: Is Chess Cool? There has certainly…
VCE Language Analysis essay scoring 90%: Amid a worldwide surge in interest in chess, sparked by pop culture phenomena like The Queen’s Gambit and…
Amid a worldwide surge in interest in chess, sparked by pop culture phenomena like The Queen’s Gambit and online gaming platforms, the university Chess Club’s article “Is Chess Cool?” addresses readers within its campus community to redefine what makes the game enduringly relevant. Through an informative yet persuasive tone, the writer contends that chess is far more than a fleeting social trend; it is a timeless exercise in intellect, discipline and beauty. Initially adopting an authoritative and reflective tone before shifting towards warm encouragement, the writer appeals to both new students and nostalgic veterans. By combining factual evidence, logical reasoning and aesthetic appreciation, the article aims to transform momentary fascination into long-term commitment, urging readers to view chess not as fashionable recreation, but as a lasting pursuit of strategic mastery and shared community.
From the outset, the writer of “Is Chess Cool?” seeks to construct a voice of authority and authenticity, grounding their credibility in both lived experience and empirical reasoning before attempting to persuade. The writer opens with factual statistics, “From October 2020 to April 2022, Chess.com saw more than a 100 percent increase in registrations”, to legitimise the claim that chess is experiencing an unprecedented revival. By relying on quantifiable data rather than abstract opinion, the writer projects an image of reason and intellectual rigour, appealing to a tertiary audience that values evidence and research-based argument. This calculated precision immediately distinguishes the piece from casual opinion and positions the speaker as a rational observer within an emotional debate. Simultaneously, the inclusive pronoun “we traditional chess lovers” cultivates solidarity between the author and long-term enthusiasts. The nostalgic modifier “traditional” elevates the writer to the role of custodian of the game’s heritage, while the collective “we” dismantles hierarchical distance, signalling camaraderie rather than condescension. Such language invites both veteran and novice players to engage on equal footing, transforming potential defensiveness into receptiveness. Further credibility is built through the tonal juxtaposition of “delighted by the new interest” and “a bit uncomfortable about it.” This subtle admission of uncertainty functions as a concession, demonstrating reflective honesty rather than blind advocacy. By conceding potential flaws in the newfound enthusiasm, the writer deepens ethos, depicting the Chess Club as reasoned guardians of authenticity rather than elitist purists. Collectively, these strategies, factual validation, shared identity, and tempered self-awareness, enable the author to establish a persuasive foundation of measured credibility, ensuring that subsequent appeals to logic and emotion are received with trust and respect by their educated, intellectually curious audience.
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Language Analysis: Debate about whether FOGO (waste…
VCE Language Analysis essay scoring 72.5%: 16/10/25 The increase in wastage has sparked a proposal, with supporters believing that FOGO services is…
16/10/25
The increase in wastage has sparked a proposal, with supporters believing that FOGO services is necessary in reducing these numbers of wastage. In Sharma's opinion piece(?) she utilises a spritful and optimistic tone to argue that adopting services such as FOGO would be key in reducing our harm to our environment. Through her tone, she urges councillors of Merraways to pursue implementation to further reinforce the idea of sustainability and reducing waste.
In the beginning, Sharma frames her argument around a opinion piece, with a clear stance that FOGO services should be implemented. Aiming to evoke connectedness from local residents towards the adoption of them. Her optimistic tone states that "there is no time to waste", as results of other councils becoming "greener and cleaner" highlights the importance that FOGO would have in reducing wastage, resulting in a cleaner environment. Sharma aims to outline the services benefits in a hopeful tone, in order to garner support from the readers (local residents). She further builds on this idea, claiming FOGO is a "vital service", depicting their work as crucial to reducing wastage. Utilising/shifting to a stern tone, she uses negative connotations to outline FOGO as vital, and its significance, using a harsher tone to create a sense of urgency amongst local residents in hopes to posite readers outlook on the issue to be more positive. Shifting to a concerned tone, she further highlights how ineffective existing measures such as "home-composting" is as not "practical" for everybody. With a switch in tones from a positive to concerned tone, it demonstrates that current waste methods are inconvenient and inconsistent. As a result, Sharma aims to depict the weaknesses of these strategies to illustrate to local residents that FOGO should be introduced as its convenient and consistent. Further to garner support from the residents.
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Language Analysis: Social Media Ban
VCE Language Analysis essay scoring 67.5%: In response to the Australian Government’s proposed legislation to ban social media for users under 16,…
In response to the Australian Government’s proposed legislation to ban social media for users under 16, independent MP Andrew Wilkie published an opinion piece titled “Why I’ve changed my mind about the social media bill” in The Guardian (27 November 2024). Initially supportive of the ban, Wilkie shifts his position after listening to experts, constituents, and young people. He argues that the proposed ban is a simplistic and politically motivated response to a complex issue. Through a reflective and empathetic tone, Wilkie appeals to logic, ethics, and emotion to highlight the importance of online communities, the vagueness of the legislation, and the need for reform that holds tech companies accountable. His article targets parents, voters, and policymakers, urging them to reconsider the bill and advocate for more meaningful solutions.
Wilkie opens his argument by establishing credibility and trust with the audience through a candid and reflective tone. He confesses that he “was wrong and changed [his] mind,” challenging common expectations of politicians and presenting himself as honest and open to evidence. By referencing his role as a parent to teenage children, he builds rapport with readers who share similar concerns. The photograph beneath the opening, featuring Wilkie in court beside a quote about online safety and community, visually reinforces his empathetic position. He argues that, for many teenagers—particularly those in rural or marginalised communities—social media is “a place to build community and ensure they don’t feel alone.” This use of inclusive and emotionally charged language reframes social media as a space of belonging and safety. Furthermore, he criticises the imbalance in public debate, stating that “the voices of children and young people have been conspicuously missing,” and appeals to the United Nations Convention on the Rights of the Child to support his claim that youth should be heard in decisions affecting them. These strategies position readers to see the proposed ban not as protective, but as a silencing mechanism that strips agency from the very people it claims to help.
Wilkie builds on this emotional foundation by challenging the effectiveness of the ban through appeals to logic and evidence. He acknowledges the risks associated with social media—such as harmful content and exposure to dangerous ideas—but argues that these are not
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Language Analysis: vcaa 21 aa
VCE Language Analysis essay scoring 77.5%: As major threats to the cinema industry continue to threaten local community Toppdale cinema there is a risk…
As major threats to the cinema industry continue to threaten local community Toppdale cinema there is a risk of being forced to shut down. Consequently, Ava, marketing manager of the cinema shares a social media post to the residents of Toppdale and the broader community in which she contends that the cinema is too valuable of an asset to lose. Ava aspires to garner support and attract customers, new and old, to the business in hopes it will save the historical cinema.
Ava deliberately begins her piece by reminding her audience of the longstanding history of the cinema before introducing the threats the cinema faces. Describing the cinema as the “towns backbone” puts forth the notion that cinema acts similarly to a person apart of the town. Additionally, by describing it as the “backbone” Ava intends to imply that without it the town will be unsupported and crumble. This compels the residents to want to care for the cinema like it is one of them and feel concerned about the future of the town if it shuts down. Only after having reminded her audience of the cinema's significance does Ava introduce the risk that Toppdale’s cinema could close “forever”. Utilising an urgent tone Ava shares that there has been a “drop of well over 50%” of people coming to the business. These notions express the urgency of the risk and further create a panic within her audience, so they act quickly to defend the business and implies the irreplaceability of the business within the community.
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Language Analysis: Sarah Greenaway Mumbrella opinion…
VCE Language Analysis essay scoring 75%: Marty Sheargolds recent derogatory statements regarding the Matildas female soccer team has created turmoil…
Marty Sheargolds recent derogatory statements regarding the Matildas female soccer team has created turmoil within the world of Womens Sports, sparking an opinion piece to be written by Sarah Greenaway to Mumbrella. Greenaways utilisation of an upset yet annoyed tone emphasises her opinion that it is actions like Sheargolds that are leading to the decrease in young girls participation in sports. Through attempting to appeal to the hearts of Mumbrella readers, Greenaway highlights that it is important for young girls to continue to participate in sports.
Greenaway opens her piece by saying that 'Marty Sheargold's attitude across the matildas is why girls quit sport' to immediately spotlight the power that people with influence's words and statements can have on young girls throughout the nation. The use of words such as 'humor and jokes' are designed to elicit the idea that people with influence get away with saying vulgar things which can diminish the 'professionalism' of the Matildas but also 'reinforce the outdated trope' that women in sports don't deserve the same respect as men. Greenaway's blatant disgust attempts to persuade readers to inform themselves on the carelessness of people who have a platform. Greenaway contradicts the idea that women in sport don't deserve respect by highlighting the progressiveness in Womens sports and that womens sport is not 'laughable or less important' than
This depiction is further seen in the image Greenway included which hones in on a Matilda's player signing the shirt of a young girl with what seems cloud behind her, emphasizing to the readers that womens sport shouldn't be classed as yet something to.
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Language Analysis: keep in mind this essay is not on the…
VCE Language Analysis essay scoring 95%: Revised Introduction (micro focus added) In her persuasive social media post to the Amundsen Council’s private…
Revised Introduction (micro focus added)
In her persuasive social media post to the Amundsen Council’s private group, art therapist Cara Ferguson crafts a nuanced defence of local graffiti, reframing it as a form of “unique,” “valuable” artistic expression rather than “vandalism.” Through a carefully modulated voice that oscillates between warmth and quiet authority, Ferguson manipulates tone, modality, and visual evidence to shift the reader’s perception from condemnation to appreciation. Her use of colloquial diction (“popping up around town”) mimics online discourse, while the interspersed technical lexis of art therapy (“process our emotions,” “grounded and in control”) lends professional gravitas. Together, these textual choices underpin her purpose: to persuade sceptical residents to recontextualise graffiti as a vital manifestation of community creativity and psychological wellbeing.
Revised Body Paragraph 1 – Linguistic Precision and Tone Calibration
Ferguson’s opening line — “I’ve seen a lot of talk about the street art that’s been popping up around town” — exemplifies how informal register establishes accessibility. The verb phrase “popping up” carries light, kinetic connotations that render graffiti energetic and spontaneous rather than invasive. Her parenthetical aside, “perhaps a little confused,” softens accusation through the hedging adverb “perhaps”, positioning dissenting residents not as ignorant but as uncertain. This linguistic mitigation functions to reduce defensiveness and prepare readers for reframing.
Her repetition of evaluative adjectives — “unique,” “valuable,” “improved” — layers positive semantic prosody over what might otherwise be contentious images of spray paint and tagging. In doing so, Ferguson linguistically inverts the connotations of vandalism. The juxtaposition of “vandalism” in scare quotes signals her challenge to its legitimacy as a descriptor, visually cueing scepticism and inviting the audience to question entrenched labels. These subtle tonal calibrations collectively construct Ferguson’s credibility: she is neither dismissive nor deferential, but calmly authoritative.
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Language Analysis: keep in mind this essay is not on the…
VCE Language Analysis essay scoring 82.5%: Introduction In her persuasive social media post to the Amundsen Council’s private group, art therapist Cara…
Introduction
In her persuasive social media post to the Amundsen Council’s private group, art therapist Cara Ferguson argues that graffiti should not be dismissed as vandalism but rather embraced as a meaningful form of artistic and psychological self-expression. Responding to community complaints about street art, Ferguson appeals to residents’ empathy, reason and sense of collective pride to reframe graffiti as a practice that beautifies and connects rather than defaces. Through a blend of inclusive language, professional credibility and emotive imagery, Ferguson crafts a conciliatory yet assertive argument that invites her audience to reconsider their assumptions and engage in a more compassionate discussion about art in public spaces.
Body Paragraph 1 – Building Credibility and Establishing Common Ground
Ferguson opens her post with an inclusive and conversational tone, immediately positioning herself as a reasonable and community-minded figure rather than a confrontational outsider. By acknowledging that “some people are just unsure — and perhaps a little confused” about graffiti, she establishes common ground with sceptical readers, validating their discomfort while gently challenging its basis. The casual diction (“I’ve seen a lot of talk about the street art that’s been popping up”) mirrors the informal style of social media and reinforces her relatability. This tone is further softened through the collective pronoun “we”, which creates a sense of shared responsibility in “talking about what ‘real’ art is.” Such language transforms potential hostility into a collaborative discussion, preparing the audience to engage more openly with her perspective. Her role as an art therapist — introduced early — bolsters her ethos, signalling both professional expertise and emotional sensitivity. This balance of familiarity and authority enhances Ferguson’s credibility and makes her argument appear informed rather than opinionated.
Body Paragraph 2 – Emotional Appeals and Humanising Graffiti Artists
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With the increased usage of recreational drones in regional Victoria, farmer Warwick Bandle's speech given on an unknown date to the Byways Shire Council aims to bring awareness to the issue. The transcript firmly asserts that those flying drones need more vigorous training to be able to do so, with the amount of harmful incidents on the rise.
Bandle begins his speech by promptly stating the issues he as a farmer has been faced with from other drone users. The example of them "crashing at the sky" being potentially 'lethal' aims to evoke fear from the council, to have them wonder if the thrill of flying these 'toys' is really worth a life in exchange. The agricultural implications mentioned like irresponsible drone users 'crashing through crops' and 'letting livestock out' are evidence that personally effects not only Bandle, but also the other local farmers who are the 'backbone of the community'. Being able to provide such direct examples efficiently provoke council members to view the issue from the speakers perspective and truly see how it is impacting so many who live in the area. The image of the crashed drone heavily dramaticises the scenarios aforementioned, with the women trampling towards the drone to retrieve it.
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A group of young musicians in the Narrow Valley region have recently gained interest in more opportunities for performances in the area. Consequently, the group shared an open letter to the Narrow Valley community across a wide range of publications. They contend that the region has plentiful opportunities of great venues that could be utilised and revamped to bring fresh interest and energy. The group aspires to garner support from the community for these projects in hopes they can bring life back into the region.
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VCE Language Analysis essay scoring 75%: In the 'Wildlife Chat' podcast by the city museum, Willow Nguyen contends that birdwatching is a rewarding,…
In the 'Wildlife Chat' podcast by the city museum, Willow Nguyen contends that birdwatching is a rewarding, accessible hobby that benefits both the environment and the individual, and everyone (especially teens) should give it a try. Shifting in tone from a friendly to an encouraging tone, Nguyen blends persuasive strategies such as inclusive language, statistics, anecdotes as well as an overall, friendly, conversational tone to inspire teenagers to engage with conservation by participating in birdwatching and attending the museum's event. Addressing Australian teenagers' while appealing to values of environmental responsibility, youth empowerment, curiosity and learning, as well as connection and belonging - the piece seeks to reshape teenagers' understanding of bird conservation in Australia. The accompanying visuals - the first depicting a parrot on a tree branch of blooming flowers, symbolically suggesting harmony and coexistence between wildlife and nature, mirroring Nguyen's message that humans and nature can thrive together through respectful engagement like bird watching. The second visual is an image showing a teenage girl wearing a backpack and holding binoculars, standing in a forest and gazing upward with a smile as sunlight falls across her face, symbolically conveying curiosity and discovery, and youthful optimism and enlightenment, as well as connection with nature. Both visuals strengthen the argument by virtually celebrating the beauty of nature and the joy of engaging with it.
Nguyen begins with a friendly tone that establishes rapport with her teenage listeners. Using colloquial language and self-deprecating humour to dismantle the barrier between expert and audience, ensuring her later appeals to conservation feel accessible rather than instructive. By greeting her audience with a relaxed salutation like "Hi all," her relaxed register subtly guides her teenage listeners to feel included and at ease. Her approach using colloquial phrasing a playful, self-mocking humour when she introduces herself as "your friendly neighbourhood teenage science nerd" fosters trust and engagement, positioning Nguyen as a peer rather than a lecturer, which makes her later conservation and mindfulness appeals feel approachable and worth listening to.
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VCE Language Analysis essay scoring 65%: In the 'Wildlife Chat' podcast by the city museum, Willow Nguyen contends that birdwatching is a rewarding,…
In the 'Wildlife Chat' podcast by the city museum, Willow Nguyen contends that birdwatching is a rewarding, accessible hobby that benefits both the environment and the individual, and everyone (especially teens) should give it a try. Shifting in tone from a friendly to an encouraging tone, Nguyen blends persuasive strategies such as inclusive language, statistics, anecdotes as well as an overall, friendly, conversational tone to inspire teenagers to engage with conservation by participating in birdwatching and attending the museum's event. Addressing Australian teenagers' while appealing to values of environmental responsibility, youth empowerment, curiosity and learning, as well as connection and belonging - the piece seeks to reshape teenagers' understanding of bird conservation in Australia. The accompanying visuals - the first depicting a parrot on a tree branch of blooming flowers, symbolically suggesting harmony and coexistence between wildlife and nature, mirroring Nguyen's message that humans and nature can thrive together through respectful engagement like bird watching. The second visual is an image showing a teenage girl wearing a backpack and holding binoculars, standing in a forest and gazing upward with a smile as sunlight falls across her face, symbolically conveying curiosity and discovery, and youthful optimism and enlightenment, as well as connection with nature. Both visuals strengthen the argument by virtually celebrating the beauty of nature and the joy of engaging with it.
Nguyen begins with a friendly tone that establishes rapport with her teenage listeners. Using colloquial language and self-deprecating humour to dismantle the barrier between expert and audience, ensuring her later appeals to conservation feel accessible rather than instructive. By greeting her audience with a relaxed salutation her relaxed register subtly guides her teenage listeners to feel included and at ease. Her approach using colloquial phrasing a playful, self-mocking humour fosters trust and engagement, positioning Nguyen as a peer rather than a lecturer, which makes her later conservation and mindfulness appeals feel approachable and worth listening to.